Come inside to see how preferences can change a caption, maybe for the better?
The first version is the one posted up above, and the modified/final version is the 2nd one.
Wrote this up, went to publish it, then looked at Drew's preferences again and missed the "no machines" part of her preferences. Went back and tried to rewrite it more to take away much of the "machine nature" of it to emphasize the heat and water aspects in the change. Not sure how well I succeeded since I believe that she is currently on her actual honeymoon. Once she gets back, I'm guessing she'll let us know how well we did on the "Save the Haven" fund-raiser.
So, what do you think of the differences? I am not sure if I made a few other changes before I had saved the 1st version because I wanted to show the contrasts. I think what I "fixed" is fairly superficial; technically he's still turning into a version of his wife's mother. Just how I worded the changes and how exactly the changes took place is the difference. Even the word "tube" changed into "cube" seemed to make it feel less impersonal for some unknown reason.
Since I haven't heard back from Drew, and no one else commented on it, I would love to hear from my followers what you think of the caption in general, and which do you think was more effective in getting the story across? This seems like another one of those ideas I had that might work better as a short fiction story, where the process can be gotten into much more detail .. and show the after-effects .. which to me is just as interesting to me. Will the parents think he's still a fuck-up but maybe a TG fuck-up or understand he was trying to be nice? What will the fiance think? How does Drew act, more like his old self, or like his future wife's aunt/sister/mother? Is it temporary or permanent?
Tell me what you think happens when the caption ends?
Here's a fun video .. Weird Al did one official cover song each night on this current tour. It was the 1st encore and he never repeated a tune. In chronological order, he's a clip from each encore he performed in 2018. It's 27 minutes of pure fun!