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Leveling the Hockey Field The Only Way Dee Knows How!

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Hockey field .. field hockey? Get it! Arrgghh! Fine! It's cheesy but it works!


No pleasing some straw men and straw women, eh?

I was watching game 7 of the Bruins / Maple Leafs and worked up a caption idea in my head and fleshed it out once the final horn sounded. Couldn't really find a great field hockey picture that had the girl playing in what I consider to be a typical field hockey uniform.

Well, perhaps because they don't wear them like they used to back when I was in High School .. so I went in a bit of a different direction and I think it worked out better, as I get to have Kevin actually attend school in a skirt as an even bigger punishment that just having him run around for the girl's team. One of those times where I took a negative and worked it out into a big positive. Sometimes adversity can make you work harder and the final result better.

After cramming in the text into the setting, I pondered deleting the first two paragraphs, but if I did, I wondered if people would get that Kevin was now suiting up for the field hockey team. There really wasn't anything particularly linking that team to ice hockey until the middle of the story. Would people pick up on the subtleness of the skirt Chloe was wearing enough to make the connection?

Let me know what you think, either way. The text would breathe more, but is there enough setup for you to understand what was going on without it? As it was, trying to explain Dee's plan went a bit too long for me. I think results may vary on your part. I'll definitely take some honest opinions. I am wondering if a second panel might have fleshed it out better. What sayeth you, the readers?!?


Bruins win game 7! Sorry Toronto fans. Maybe next year?!?

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